小三英文写作一篇

NJTSG88 · 发表于 26-4-2012 00:14:13|来自：新加坡

前段时间，学校带孩子们去了动物园，回来让孩子做一个动物的手工作品，并且要选出好的作品代表学校参加新加坡动物设计的比赛，获奖的还可以获得品牌赞助商的奖励，儿子回来利用废品做了一个带轮子的鲸鱼，功夫没白费，成为班级选送的三件作品之一参加新加坡全国的比赛，至于比赛结果还没有出来，随后老师又要求他们根据自己的作品写一份信，以下是吾儿的写作，大家分享，也希望达人给予指点，先谢了！
Dear Pet Owner,
I’m the king of the sea, my name is Killer Whale. I have a quite large body but I’ll be very happy if you call me baby.
We are one of the biggest family in the world, and we are the biggest mammal in water. We are black and white in color, when we jump out of the water, it is gorgeous. We live in water most of the time but we breath by lung, we have blowholes on our heads and when we spread water from the blowhole, it’s wonderful and it looks like a fountain I think. We feed on different kinds of fishes and usually we hunt in groups. We suckle our babies with our milk and take good care of them by ourselves.
We can be good pets, and we can be good friends of our owner. We’d like to take our owner to have a magical trip on water, you sit on our back just like sitting in a very speed ship, can you imagine that, is it a little be crazy, but it’ll be cool I think. Don’t be nervous, we can protect you well and get away from the sharks. If you give us some encourage like delicious salmons, we’ll make some tricks for you and jump out of water then turn around, we can jump and kick the ball as well it depends on the rewards.
Dear owner, we only have a few suggestions, we’d like you to give us a bath everyday and play some music for us when we are going to sleep, most of all, feed us nice and fresh salmons everyday, if so, you must be my best owner and we’re sure to be your lovely pet.

Yours Sincerely
Killer Whale.

jjrchome · 发表于 26-4-2012 01:20:42|来自：新加坡

写的不错，赞一下。

有一点点瑕疵，更改如下：

I’m the king of the sea,my name is Killer Whale. I have a quite large body but I’ll be very happy if you call me baby.

We are the members of one of the biggest families in the world, and we are the biggest mammal in water. We are black and white in color,  and it is gorgeous when we jump out of the water. We spend most of our time in water but we breathe by lung. We have blowholes on our heads and when we spray water from the blowhole, it’s wonderful as it looks like a fountain I think. We feed on different kinds of fishes and  we usually hunt in groups. We suckle our babies with our milk and take good care of them by ourselves.

We can be good pets, and we can be good friends of our owner.  We’d like to take our owner on a trip in water, sitting on our back just like sitting in a very speed ship. Can you imagine that? Is it a little be crazy? But it’ll be cool I think. Don’t be nervous, we can protect you well and get you away from the sharks. If you give us some encourage like delicious salmons, we’ll make some tricks for you, like jumping out of water then turning around. We can jump or kick the ball，depending on the rewards.

Dear owner, we have only a few suggestions. We’d like you to give us a bath everyday and play some music for us when we are going to sleep. Most of all, feed us nice and fresh salmons everyday.  If so, you must be my best owner and we’re sure to be your lovely pet.

另外，虎鲸不是最大的哺乳动物, 蓝鲸才是。