帮帮忙，请高手给改改！谢谢了。。。。。

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猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 25-10-2004 03:17:29|来自：广东江门

Have a perfect mastery of professional knowledge 改为 proficiency in professional knowledge 好像好点I have completed the study in professional course 要加复数Food Machine, and so on, 用etc.是比较书面化participate in investigation and reasoning of new technic and food,因为你前面是过去时,所以participate也应该是过去时,可能technic改为technology比较好,而且都要加复数Skillfut at computer craftsmanship 的Skillfut是错别字..应为skillful"Photoshop" and some software最后还是没有复数have good skills in maintenance of software and hardware of computer. 没有主语I got the praise in participate in the design and manufacture of the "network prime course" in this specialty 中的praise改为compliments比较好,participate应为participationI have broad interest还是没有复数excellent handle ability and definite ability in useing and maintenance of electronic and mechanical products改为excellent management ability,第二个ability改为capability就不会太累赘,还有,,using不是useingI also study elective course 没有复数professional knowledge and skills of computer and integration quality unequal to success改为only possessing professional knowledge, skills of computer and integration quality can't be equal to the fact of success这样好像好点I would appreciate the opportunity to join your staff 复数I enclose a resume and could be available for an interview at your convenience应该是it would be available.......

猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 25-10-2004 17:53:42|来自：广东江门

sorry...no sufficient time to read and think....and it is just my some suggestions...

stockard · 发表于 25-10-2004 23:41:24|来自：广东江门

so difficult adm ,now i know how difficult to do as a adm have to do those i feel headache long time never do this kind of word and grammer correction

hello_babe · 发表于 26-10-2004 12:34:56|来自：广东江门

We don't have to correct every mistake. We may not have time.Well, for this proposal, a lot of professional words are involved. I guess I don't have the right to comment on it. I had better not do so. I suggest that you may forward your proposal or letter to Mr Ben Di Hua Ren.He will help you.Stockard, you have some grammatic errors and please do not use short-forms!!!!

死珊珊 · 发表于 26-10-2004 15:41:59|来自：广东江门

猫猫抱抱我 好强呀

stockard · 发表于 26-10-2004 15:33:30|来自：广东江门

okie ,okie sorry for the mistakes i made

猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 26-10-2004 16:40:03|来自：广东江门

not a good job....so bored.....tired.....tasteless

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